Message #192

Thursday, October 12, 2000

 

“Don’t discuss yourself, for you are bound to lose. If you belittle yourself, you are believed. If you praise yourself, you are disbelieved.”

Michel de Montaigne

 

HOW TO BE A MASTER HEADLINE WRITER

 

Today, I want to talk about headlines. What I have to say, however, applies not only to headlines, but also to envelope teasers, subheads, classified ads, banner-ad leads, and other tricks of the trade that copywriters use to hook a prospect’s attention.

 

The hook you use to attract customers is, in several ways, the most important component of your advertising strategy. In the next five minutes, you are going to learn just about everything you need to know to become a great headline writer. Pay attention, and you will be richly rewarded by the results of your promotions for years to come.

 

Headlines And Other Hooks

 

Advertising hooks determine how many prospective customers give your sales pitch that critical second glance. They create a mood that makes the sale easier. And they establish a promise on which you can build not only an immediate sale but also a long-term business relationship.

 

Every direct-mail pro who has ever written on the subject has emphasized the importance of hooks and headlines. Some, such as David Ogilvy and Gene Schwartz, claim heads are so important that they merit half your advertising time and attention.

 

It doesn’t matter whether you advertise in newspapers and magazines, on television and radio, or via direct mail – when it comes to starting the selling process, hooks and headlines are critical. My own experience confirms this. I’ve seen headlines double response rates. Many times, I’ve heard stories of headlines tripling and quadrupling responsiveness. I’ve never seen that much impact from changing the body of the sales letter. Usually, you can expect to get a 25% to 50% lift from changing the body copy. And the body copy can be dozens of pages of work!

 

According to Nat Bodian, a prolific writer on direct marketing, about five times as many people will read a headline as read the body copy. If 20% is the average, the range is probably 0% to 40% – plenty of room to affect results. I have seen newspaper ads that doubled their response rates when nothing more than a single seven-word headline was changed. I have seen direct-mail packages – countless numbers of them – achieve lifts of 25% and more.

 

The challenge is that you have only a few seconds, at best, to make your headline work. It has an effect on your copy that is 80% of the game, yet it must be done with very few words. That’s why so many great advertisers spend so much time getting the heads right.

 

There are plenty of rules about headlines. I’m not a big believer in rules, as you know. I think it’s much better to understand the principles behind them. But for today, to get the conversation started, I’ve collected a few of the rules that I think make the most sense. (These rules work for both general advertising and direct-response ads.)

 

A good headline should:

 

1. Make a promise that benefits the reader

 

2. Create a sense of urgency by using “magic” words (such as “new,” “here,” “now,” “announcing,” and “discover”)

 

3. Reduce buyer resistance by using two more magic words (“free” and “guaranteed”)

 

4. Lead the reader into the copy (That simply makes sense. Advertising must be coherent.)

 

5. Make the reader feel as if he is being addressed personally (The rule is to use yet another magic word: “you.”)

 

In the cyber age, a few new rules have appeared:

 

1. Don’t force a website visitor to go back to a lobby after clicking to a screen. Instead, sell the benefits of moving to the next screen by using short subheads.

 

2. Enhance benefit statements by using images that suggest benefits. Instead of writing, “Click here for fabulous profit opportunities,” shorten your message and quicken its impact with the words “fabulous profit opportunities” next to an icon in the form of a dollar sign.

 

None of these rules contradicts a study done years ago by Dr. Henry Durant (reported in Research in Advertising) that identified five common types of headlines:

 

* those that use teasers

* those that use word play

* those that “brag and boast”

* those that say little or nothing

* those that directly present benefits or news

 

Durant’s analysis of results showed that the ads with direct headlines were about 4 times more effective than the others. Keep that in mind the next time you want to get clever with puns or alliteration.

 

David Ogilvy said, “Some copywriters write tricky headlines, puns, literacy allusions and other obscurities. This is a sin! Every headline should appeal to the reader’s self-interest. It should promise the reader a benefit.”

 

And advertising great Claude Hopkins had this to say: “When you advertise . . . your product will interest certain people only. You care only for those people. Create your advertisement for those people only.”

 

Two good examples of headlines used to sell fitness equipment (provided by Jim Kobs of Kobs, Gregory and Passavant advertising):

 

* for the Lifecycle bike: “Free Facts That Can Cut Your Exercise Time in Half”

 

* for the Bullworker: “The Belly Must Go”

 

And two good suggestions from Robert Bly (an advisor to AWAI) on how NOT to write a headline:

 

Make sure your headline is NOT . . .

 

* vague: “A New Breed of Flexibility” or “The Best for the Least!”

 

* clever: “General Electric Can Light Up Your Life” (or anything alliterative).

 

OK. That’s enough for now. Consider today’s message to be a primer in headlines. (We’ll go a little deeper in a future message.)

 

If you are a student of AWAI or are a natural born marketer, you already know these rules. But beware. Even the best copywriters and advertisers fail occasionally because they make the simplest mistakes. And the simple mistakes are the costliest. So even if you think you know everything there is to know about writing headlines, review today’s lesson – and check it against what you are currently doing.

 

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RICH SOUNDS IN THE EARLY MORNING

 

You can’t buy a better mood than you’ll get from trumpeter Chet Baker. I’m not a jazz aficionado, but I find instrumental, upbeat jazz best for our ETR rituals: getting the workplace organized, going over goals and tasks, stretching, etc. Some people prefer rock ‘n’ roll. I suppose the choice has something to do with the kind of work you do. But if you need to do some contemplative thinking and get into a positive groove at the same time, I can’t think of a better recommendation than the playful, sassy – but never harsh – trumpet of Chet Baker. It’s the kind of sound you will still enjoy when you are living off your billion-dollar retirement fund.

 

MMF

 

TOMORROW

 

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